This reads like the best kind of narrative chaos, where humour, pacing, and character all work together beneath the surface to build something far sharper than its comic veneer suggests. The dialogue is wonderfully alive, and the observational detail gives it that BBC-backroom authenticity. What I enjoy most, though, is how you let the absurdity reveal the tension rather than forcing it. That restraint is what makes the “uncanny” far more effective. I’m curious to see how you balance the comedy with whatever terror you’re leading us toward.
I can't wait for part 2. I was like I like it like! I love all the little touches that just make everything 'real'. Great great great!
I will tidy Part 2 later today in theory. Thank you for liking my madness.
About to read part 2, but I cackled at all the “likes” when she was story telling hahaha
That is actually modelled on somebody I worked with. When I escaped the office to actually make stuff, I sometimes ended up within earshot of:
’Eee, and then when he, you know, like, you know, I was 😧and then after I was 😧 and when she came back, like oh my God I was 😧…’
Continued for 8 bloody hours.
Hahaha I actually have people in classes who are like this too. So it’s good to know that this condition is global 😭
I love this! I can't wait to read about the lighthouse. It feels ominous that they weren't given many details about it!
“Grinned like a gargoyle on LSD”. That’s definitely a first 😂
This reads like the best kind of narrative chaos, where humour, pacing, and character all work together beneath the surface to build something far sharper than its comic veneer suggests. The dialogue is wonderfully alive, and the observational detail gives it that BBC-backroom authenticity. What I enjoy most, though, is how you let the absurdity reveal the tension rather than forcing it. That restraint is what makes the “uncanny” far more effective. I’m curious to see how you balance the comedy with whatever terror you’re leading us toward.